HBO Fan Fiction

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A Series of Poems: Darkness Erupts Mini-series: Poem 2
Posted by (ENS) Rabid_Gallagher (rabid_masterchief@hotmail.com(STOP SPAMMING ME! I DON'T WANT FREE PORN!))
29 December 2004, 10:15 PM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=ens_rabid_ga.1229042215546.html

MC's Cousin · Mr. 1337 Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 2142 Location: Here.

Nice e-mail address, ENS.

Kinda chopyy, I suppose. I thought to ail that it could have flowed a bit more, or had some more pose or symbolism. Something to spice it up and amp it to the max; you know.

Overall, it was pretty good. Nothing spectacular, but nice to read every update. Keep these up - just keep your work towards improvement up, too.
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