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A Marine's Prayer
Posted by Solidus Snake (Chi KoRn x@aol.com)
1 August 2004, 9:45 PM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=solidus_snak.0801042145051.html

Walker · Member Joined: 29 Jul 2004 Posts: 11 Location: Texas

It wasn't as poetic as I would have liked, but it was still good. I especially liked the last line. Keep it up, Solidus!

CovieKilla · Posted: Tue Aug 03, 2004 3:38 am Post subject:

I really enjoyed it Solidus, good work...My new favorite poem written by you. Keep up the nice work! 9.5/10.

Chuckles · Posted: Tue Aug 03, 2004 12:37 pm Post subject:

Nice job. Different, but nice.

C.T. Clown

SYSTEM · Posted: Tue Aug 03, 2004 1:44 pm Post subject:

It was touching. I want to cry now....

- Dave.
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"When in doubt, empty your magazine." - Murphy's first law of combat operations.

Elitehunter676 · Posted: Tue Aug 03, 2004 9:47 pm Post subject:

Nice, keep it up.

-"Son have you ever seen an empty casket?"
-"Sir yes sir."
-"Good, remeber that sight, because you won't see one here."

Solidus Snake · Posted: Wed Aug 04, 2004 2:20 am Post subject:

Thanks, I'm not gonna write for a while, I've been really stressed and school is about to start and I'll be pretty busy.

echo3kilo · Member Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 25 Location: cary, nc

great poem. did you know there's an actual Marine's prayer? It's said by navy chaplains just before Marine's go to battle, i'll try to find it for a post...here ya go.

Almighty Father , whose command is over all and whose love never fails, make me aware of Thy presence and obedient to Thy will. Keep me true to my best self, guarding me against dishonesty in purpose and deed and helping me to live so that I can face my fellow Marines, my loved ones and Thee without shame or fear. Protect my family. Give me the will to do the work of a Marine and to accept my share of responsibilities with vigor and enthusiasm. Grant me the courage to be proficient in my daily performance. Keep me loyal and faithful to my superiors and to the duties my country and the Marine Corps have entrusted to me. Make me considerate of those committed to my leadership. Help me to wear my uniform with dignity, and let it remind me daily of the traditions which I must uphold.

If I am inclined to doubt, steady my faith; if I am tempted, make me strong to resist; if I should miss the mark, give me courage to try again.

Guide me with the light of truth and grant me wisdom by which I may understand the answer to my prayer.
AMEN.

Nick Kang · Posted: Thu Aug 05, 2004 2:55 am Post subject:

*sniff*

Okay, this was awesome. That's all I have to say.
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Conrad Lauf · Member Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 139 Location: Australia

Whoa...That's some really deep stuff. That was one of the most...I don't know...depressing and thoughtful piece of poetry I think I've read on this site. Definitely write more! Crying or Very sad