HBO Fan Fiction

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Halo: Stealth Combat Evolved: Part 1-Chapter 2
Posted by Mind_Affecting_Parasite (pbplayer_24@yahoo.com)
31 July 2004, 5:09 PM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=mind_affecti.0731041709203.html

[MC's Cousin]

Well, overall this was good. Just as good as your others, maybe a bit improved. The whole flashback thing was interesting. A different point of view, and new perspectives. A good way to introduce new characters though.
There wer a few time when I thought you could have used a few more details in certain space battle scenes, or made things go a different way, or where a couple details wer off or didn't totally make sense, but I just have a tendancy to notice the small stuff.

Well, you did put action and combat in this one. Not needed, but it was an interesting change and way of incorperation. Still, don't make yourself think you have to have action in every chapter. We've told you before and I'll say it again: action is on the side, focus on keeping the core story good, and everything else that follows will be good.
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-MCC

[Helljumper]

Who made the suggestion about the rank thing?????????


ODST

[Elitehunter676]

I like your dogfight, between the seraph and longsword. I don't think there are enough of those.

[Mastergrunt]

Once again MAP you have turned out another truly awesome story. I love your space battles because their one of the few realistic ones out there.