HBO Fan Fiction

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No turning back
Posted by Firerwolf (triss2008@yahoo.com)
26 February 2012, 9:21 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Firerwolf0226122121131.html

CaptainRaspberry · Posted: Wed Jul 18, 2012 11:19 pm Post subject:

It's interesting to see the way you flesh out Noble Six's background. Given her reputation later in life as a grim reaper, it seems very appropriate that she'd fight her old team as a test of her willingness to carry out her objectives.

Reading the series as a whole, plus glancing through ODSS, I can tell you've improved a lot. However, your descriptions can get a little repetitive, especially with action sequences. I also wish we got to spend more time getting to know Shar before she became singled out.

Still, though, you should keep working on this.
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