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PostPosted: Fri Aug 26, 2011 9:04 am    Post subject: ODSS Chapter 6 Reply with quote

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ODSS Chapter 6
Posted by Firerwolf (triss2008@yahoo.com)
13 August 2011, 1:34 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Firerwolf0813110134581.html
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PostPosted: Sat Aug 27, 2011 2:42 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Good job on chapter 6, Firer. I liked the way this one flowed, they're getting smoother as you write. There were some GPS errors, so keep an eye out for those. Another thing I like is the temperment difference between the Kathleen and the ODSTs, good job on that. Keep it up, and I'll be waiting for chapter 7.
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PostPosted: Sun Aug 28, 2011 9:44 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Chapter 7 will resolve what was started in this chapter. I have to admit, it don't know what you mean by GPS errors.
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PostPosted: Sun Aug 28, 2011 10:10 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Grammar, punctuation, and spelling errors, although it can also refer to misplaced or left out words which is what I believe I noticed. I'd have to read it again to figure out where it was at, so I'll do that if I can get some free time.
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