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The Second Revolution: Intro

 
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 10, 2011 4:41 pm    Post subject: The Second Revolution: Intro Reply with quote

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The Second Revolution: Intro
Posted by Archangel_7 (xx_74_xx@hotmail.com)
9 June 2011, 9:33 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Archangel_70609112133441.html
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 10, 2011 5:19 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Author's Note:

Years since I've submitted anything, and there's a glaring error in the first two sentences. Damn.

In case your "Sue" flags go up for the character introduced here, you can rest assured that A.) Damien is most certainly not the main character, and B.) Everything that seems... out of place does have a purpose and explanation.

Thanks,

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PostPosted: Mon Jul 18, 2011 5:42 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I'm really a bit ashamed it took more than a month for any of us to comment on this, because it's really excellent, and an old regular deserves better than that.

I missed the GPS errors you mentioned but caught one more small one near the end, but the writing is still well done. You provide an exceptional level of detail, but still leave a lot unexplained to follow up on later. I hope you continue with this despite the lack of comments. HBOFF's just not as busy as it used to be.
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