HBO Fan Fiction

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RtR: Part 1
Posted by Maya Tamika (krazykookoobird@gmail.com)
14 May 2011, 6:56 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Maya_Tamika0514111856511.html

Mark Lieberg · Posted: Mon Jun 27, 2011 9:52 am Post subject:

I loved the beginning bits with Cortana and the Chief, but rushing to Reach seemed exactly that...rushed.

I liked the story and how it started out though, despite the few GPS errors. It looked like you didn't proofread it as well. I'd suggest reading it over outloud or have a family member/friend read it, then voice their opinion.

I'd like to read more.
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