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Halo: Distributive Property (Chapter #2)

 
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 08, 2011 2:10 pm    Post subject: Halo: Distributive Property (Chapter #2) Reply with quote

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Halo: Distributive Property (Chapter #2)
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2 April 2011, 7:20 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=robofin1170402111920511.html
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 15, 2011 1:26 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I was a little confused as in where this chapter would lead, then realized it was number 2. I just finished reading chapter one after this one.

I think it's a great idea having kids teleported into a fictional universe 500 years in the future.

However, I think you should probably do more research before continuing this.

The way you have Halsey talk. It...just isn't hitting me. I don't really know how to explain. She just feels...different.

Also with the age thing. Are these kids freshman in high school? They would have to be what? 14 or 15? I was 14 my freshman year. One of the youngest in my class.

But if these kids are between 14 and 15 and then were put into cryo stasis to wait for the other S-II's. They would be babies in comparison to John, Linda, Fred or Kelly.

Remember that by the time the S-II's were around 14 years of age. They had bodies naturally built as Olympic Athletes. John even killed an ODST or two by accident before being Augmented. And THOSE ODST were in their 30's as well as having been in great physical shape.

I would love to continue reading this, but I'd advise doing more research.
I do enjoy the idea tho Very Happy
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 29, 2011 3:10 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Okay, I will look into it. I was kind of worried about putting too much detail in the story, but it is good to see some feedback from the Halo community.
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