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PostPosted: Fri Apr 01, 2011 2:10 pm    Post subject: Halo Reach: Last Stand Reply with quote

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Halo Reach: Last Stand
Posted by Croswynd (Croswynd@gmail.com)
31 March 2011, 5:33 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Croswynd0331110533301.html
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 04, 2011 2:41 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Great potrayal of the cutscene and the story! Emotions could be a little more down to earth, because noble six is a spartan after all.
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 05, 2011 12:56 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

It is well done, but I have to agree with PIE. Some of the emotions, the near vomiting, breaks the battle hardened Spartan that 6 is supposed to be.

It isn't terrible, it is just a bit breaking for what 6 is supposed to be. All in all, nice job.
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 15, 2011 1:11 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I was quite surprised really.

I haven't read a decent first person story in a long time, no matter how short it was.

At the end, when you had Six seeing all the Spartans at the training facility in his last vision, I was a little confused why Jorge was there. Then I remembered this guy was dying. Of course he's going to see people that weren't originally at Onyx.

Awesome job!
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