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PostPosted: Fri Jan 28, 2011 12:07 pm    Post subject: Unforgotten Reply with quote

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Posted by Lee Hung Ping (lee.hungping@dhs.sg)
24 January 2011, 2:08 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Lee_Hung_Pin0124111408081.html
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PostPosted: Sat Jan 29, 2011 5:22 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Another great poem. I am impressed that you are so deeply moved by the Halo story that you can put your thoughts into poetic prose. Thanks for sharing. Very Happy
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PostPosted: Fri Feb 04, 2011 7:21 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Although I'm not a fan of free verse, you use good descriptive imagery here. I'm always a fan of using Marty's soundtrack titles in fanfic, too. I actually wrote a bit about Harvest using the same title.

I'd be interested to see you try working with a fixed meter. You've obviously got talent with imagery, and meter can help improve that. Good work, though.
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PostPosted: Wed Mar 02, 2011 1:09 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

kr1, hungping here, sounds like you are quite a writer yourself Very Happy . Thanks for the advice and i'll work on it during my free time. (too many tests recently)
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