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Joined: 27 Feb 2007 Posts: 435 Location: UNSC Frigate September
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Posted: Fri Feb 04, 2011 8:14 pm Post subject: |
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You've got a solid piece of writing here. It's nothing too deep, but sets up well whatever story you intend to tell. My only complaint is that it's too short to get anything done. Of your five Spartans, we only get introduced to Vergil, and then just barely so.
Anyways, good stuff, and keep writing! I know it might be discouraging that you're just getting comments now, a month late, but HBOFF is slow, and even if you don't get comments, remember folks are still reading.  _________________
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