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Brief History of The Flood
Posted by 121 Guilty-Weezel
17 December 2004, 6:41 PM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=121_guilty-w.1217041841101.html

SYSTEM · Posted: Tue Dec 21, 2004 12:33 am Post subject:

Good Idea, but grammatical errors drag you down quite a bit. Plus, you're also going to need a better title. "Brief history of the Flood," is a report header, not a story title.

Try again, and remember, develop a plot and storyline, and enjoy what you do. Don't rush it.

- Dave.
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sam_fisha · Member Joined: 21 Dec 2004 Posts: 300 Location: A gutter

I think you did a pretty good job, I'm looking around for more stuff by you.

Commander Demitri Wolf · Posted: Tue Dec 21, 2004 2:51 am Post subject:

haven't we seen this story before? i'm sure we have...oh well

(ENS) Rabid_Gallagher · Posted: Tue Dec 21, 2004 7:15 am Post subject:

Yes...this story does sound familier. Hope this guy didn't proscarstiate his story. The punishment? Why, it's getting a bad case of Herpies, the worst thing that could ever happen to a man.
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sam_fisha · Member Joined: 21 Dec 2004 Posts: 300 Location: A gutter

Now that yo mention it, I think i've read it somewhere. Hmm. I think it was in the story section under flood, maybe one of the thoeries Question

(ENS) Rabid_Gallagher · Posted: Tue Dec 21, 2004 7:59 pm Post subject:

No, I mean I think I read this story before.
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Nick Kang · Posted: Tue Dec 21, 2004 9:38 pm Post subject:

There was 'Brief History of the Forerunner.'

And I liked this. It explained a lot.
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Slit Throat · Posted: Tue Dec 21, 2004 9:51 pm Post subject:

It was pretty good aside few gramatical errors. It is a good theory on the evolution of the Flood.

One thing though. Halo does not destroy the Flood. It destroys their food source. In other words, it kills everything but the Flood (assuming of course that the weapon mentioned was the Halo rings).

Commander Demitri Wolf · Posted: Tue Dec 21, 2004 10:43 pm Post subject:

oh thats right Nick I remember now, they seemed similar thats all.

121 Guilty-Weezel · Member Joined: 21 Dec 2004 Posts: 1

Hey guys,

Thanks for all the replies, as with all my writing I noticed most of my errors after I published it, I will try to edit a little more closely next time.

As for the answer of the Gravemind's pain from the blast of the Halos, I was somewhat working from the prespective of maybe the blast effected the mental "link" they share, not really sure, but that would explain the limited number of Forerunners overwhelming the distracted Flood invasion force on the rings. I should try to better explain that stuff as well. This was really an attempt to connect some of the "Offical" source info with the story I made before (Brief Forerunner History) and to keep the elements I like, i.e. the Flood being created.

Again Thanks!

SYSTEM · Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2004 1:09 am Post subject:

Ah, Hello Mr Weezel. Don't think we've ever met before.

You've got a promising career ahead of you if you keep this hard work up.

Good Luck next one.

- Dave.

Post Script - Since I do not play video games anymore, perhaps maybe you can tell me who this "Gravemind," is? I'm waiting for the Halo Books.
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"When in doubt, empty your magazine." - Murphy's first law of combat operations.

Nick Kang · Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2004 1:25 am Post subject:

Gravemid is this hugely gigantic venus fly trap thing with a countless number of tentacles. It lives under the temple that the Prophet of Regret hides in (not that you'd know what that means... Rolling Eyes

). He sends MC and the Arbiter (or who that is... Rolling Eyes

) on separate missions to find something that I can't remember at the moment. He is 'supposedly' the leader of the Flood, but no one really knows.
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MC's Cousin · Mr. 1337 Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 2142 Location: Here.

Well, we don't know all that much, Dave.

Physically, he looks like a giant Flood-form-plant. No joke. Looks like a venus flytrap with tenacles. He has a deep rubly gargly voice.

As for story-wize, he is a extremely ancient being, who has been around as long oas the Forerunner. Now, since we do not know all that much about the history here, he could have been created by the Forerunner (as our author here has previously suggested), or could have been the base creature of the Flood.
We just don't know. But, he is smart, very technilogically savy, and cery old. His demenor comes across as old, not evil, but sided in a certain way.

Basically, I'm gonna have to say this Dave: get your ass on your X-Box and play through Halo 2!
It's not to experience the game, it will enrich your understanding of the Halo-verse a lot. And that is an understatement.

As for the story, well, I would comment on it... if I could see it. I'll come back later.
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SYSTEM · Posted: Wed Dec 22, 2004 1:30 am Post subject:

Sorry, I placed my controller up on the wall long ago and I swore I would become a man of peace.

- Dave.
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"Lizzie Borden took an axe and gave her mother forty whacks. When she saw what she had done, she gave her father forty-one." - A child's nursery rhyme.

"When in doubt, empty your magazine." - Murphy's first law of combat operations.