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Scrambler (Part 2 of 3)

 
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 11, 2010 3:54 pm    Post subject: Scrambler (Part 2 of 3) Reply with quote

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Scrambler (Part 2 of 3)
Posted by The Meep (cbrooks@rivier.edu)
11 June 2010, 7:55 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=The_Meep0611100755161.html
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PostPosted: Sun Jun 13, 2010 2:24 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

This story won this week's Fic Pick.
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PostPosted: Sun Jun 13, 2010 7:31 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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PostPosted: Mon Jun 14, 2010 4:35 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I'm really liking this miniseries. It's fast-paced, and you do a wonderful job of explaining the battle, doing well to manage giving it scale while still seen from an individual perspective.

And I loved this line:

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Yama screamed over the hard line separating the shadow of the backalley from the harsh brilliance of Pallo Avenue at nearly ninety kilometers per hour, fast enough that he wasn't so much breathing as he was catching air with his open mouth.


The second part is that kind of little detail that anyone reading understands from experience, and goes a long way.

Anyways, great work. Wink
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