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(ENS) Rabid_Gallagher
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Another great addition, Raspberry. I didn't pick up on any problems, and I loved it.
Kept me in complete attention the entire time. Great job.
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Seriously professional work. It moves fast, keeps you engaged, and is EXTREMELY well-written.
I agree with Gall, I didn't see any noteworthy mistakes. Amazing job.
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I've read the first two as well as this, just hadn't gotten around to commenting till now. Excellent work as usual, Raspberry. I thought, off of the first two submissions, that these might be loosely-connected shorts, but was pleasantly surprised to see them tying together with this chapter. Solid writing, a great sense of realism, and the Innies here are a nice change of pace from the generic fare we usually get. They really feel like their own group, not some miscellaneous rebels. Great work.
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| kr1 wrote: | | I've read the first two as well as this, just hadn't gotten around to commenting till now. Excellent work as usual, Raspberry. I thought, off of the first two submissions, that these might be loosely-connected shorts, but was pleasantly surprised to see them tying together with this chapter. Solid writing, a great sense of realism, and the Innies here are a nice change of pace from the generic fare we usually get. They really feel like their own group, not some miscellaneous rebels. Great work. |
All five are part of one connected story (and there were three before this). The conclusion's coming this Friday.
I'm glad everyone's enjoying this! It took a while to plot out and write.
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Oh, I know there were three, I just skipped the third. 
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