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Orion - The Knife's Edge

 
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PostPosted: Fri Mar 19, 2010 12:54 pm    Post subject: Orion - The Knife's Edge Reply with quote

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19 March 2010, 12:19 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=CaptainRaspb0319101219181.html
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PostPosted: Fri Mar 19, 2010 5:46 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Another great addition, Raspberry. I didn't pick up on any problems, and I loved it.

Kept me in complete attention the entire time. Great job.
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PostPosted: Sat Mar 20, 2010 2:46 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Seriously professional work. It moves fast, keeps you engaged, and is EXTREMELY well-written.
I agree with Gall, I didn't see any noteworthy mistakes. Amazing job.
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PostPosted: Mon Mar 22, 2010 1:01 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I've read the first two as well as this, just hadn't gotten around to commenting till now. Excellent work as usual, Raspberry. I thought, off of the first two submissions, that these might be loosely-connected shorts, but was pleasantly surprised to see them tying together with this chapter. Solid writing, a great sense of realism, and the Innies here are a nice change of pace from the generic fare we usually get. They really feel like their own group, not some miscellaneous rebels. Great work.
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PostPosted: Mon Mar 22, 2010 1:37 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

kr1 wrote:
I've read the first two as well as this, just hadn't gotten around to commenting till now. Excellent work as usual, Raspberry. I thought, off of the first two submissions, that these might be loosely-connected shorts, but was pleasantly surprised to see them tying together with this chapter. Solid writing, a great sense of realism, and the Innies here are a nice change of pace from the generic fare we usually get. They really feel like their own group, not some miscellaneous rebels. Great work.


All five are part of one connected story (and there were three before this). The conclusion's coming this Friday.

I'm glad everyone's enjoying this! It took a while to plot out and write.
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PostPosted: Mon Mar 22, 2010 1:53 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Oh, I know there were three, I just skipped the third. Razz
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