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A Passing Shadow - The Knife's Edge

 
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PostPosted: Fri Mar 12, 2010 1:59 pm    Post subject: A Passing Shadow - The Knife's Edge Reply with quote

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11 March 2010, 5:56 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=CaptainRaspb0311101756041.html
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PostPosted: Fri Mar 12, 2010 6:19 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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It was more for comfort, as what blade could fight the black night?
- My favorite line from this chapter.

I love the detail, you kept it flowing quickly and with a constant pace, and the dialogue is still top-notch.

Is it bad that I can't really give you anything constructive other than to just keep submitting these?
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PostPosted: Sat Mar 13, 2010 3:43 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

For me, its really the dialouge that makes this story.
It describes the setting, sets the mood, and conveys the emotions. More descriptive than narrated words, and very well done.

I honestly couldn't see a single error in this piece. Loved it
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