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Where Falcons Dared: Excellence in All We Do
Posted by (ENS) Rabid_Gallagher and Jake Trommer (anthony.peter.davis@gmail.com)
3 March 2010, 2:47 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=ENS_Rabid_Ga0303100247521.html

[Shurmanator]

DAMN I've been waiting for this for a while. Glad to see you two didn't dissapoint.
Great intro, I liked how it paralleled to the Mass Effect 2 beginning cutscene, although I wouldn't peg the Illusive Man as a womanizer, but that's just my opinion. Good idea going easy on the descriptions of the Covenant too, lack of unecessary detail kept the story moving.
It was interesting to see what canon you used to base the story on; obviously Shepard is male, Spacer, and put Anderson on the council.

Anyway, sounds great, nice cast of new characters and old ones, and its basically a very well done intro to a crossover. I thought there might have been a few run-on sentences there where I lost the train of thought, and I saw a couple of GPS errors, but nothing too serious.
Overall, fantastic job.

But seriously. I swear to God, if the line "I'm tired of your disingenenous assertions" is not in this crossover somewhere, I am going to kill both of you.
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[(ENS) Rabid_Gallagher]

Thanks, Shurm!

and lol, you might see it, you might not.
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[Jake Trommer]

Thanks for the comments, Shurm! And funnily enough, you described to a T the Shepard I've been using...
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