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Posted: Fri Mar 05, 2010 2:05 pm Post subject: Where Falcons Dared: Excellence in All We Do |
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Where Falcons Dared: Excellence in All We Do
Posted by (ENS) Rabid_Gallagher and Jake Trommer (anthony.peter.davis@gmail.com)
3 March 2010, 2:47 am
http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=ENS_Rabid_Ga0303100247521.html |
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Shurmanator Member

Joined: 14 Aug 2009 Posts: 51 Location: Not Where I Should Be
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Posted: Fri Mar 05, 2010 8:31 pm Post subject: |
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DAMN I've been waiting for this for a while. Glad to see you two didn't dissapoint.
Great intro, I liked how it paralleled to the Mass Effect 2 beginning cutscene, although I wouldn't peg the Illusive Man as a womanizer, but that's just my opinion. Good idea going easy on the descriptions of the Covenant too, lack of unecessary detail kept the story moving.
It was interesting to see what canon you used to base the story on; obviously Shepard is male, Spacer, and put Anderson on the council.
Anyway, sounds great, nice cast of new characters and old ones, and its basically a very well done intro to a crossover. I thought there might have been a few run-on sentences there where I lost the train of thought, and I saw a couple of GPS errors, but nothing too serious.
Overall, fantastic job.
But seriously. I swear to God, if the line "I'm tired of your disingenenous assertions" is not in this crossover somewhere, I am going to kill both of you. _________________ Modern Machiavelli. |
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(ENS) Rabid_Gallagher Member

Joined: 19 Oct 2004 Posts: 1218 Location: Always here to help
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Posted: Fri Mar 05, 2010 8:45 pm Post subject: |
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Thanks, Shurm!
and lol, you might see it, you might not.  _________________
"My appreciation for being quoted is being masked by my distaste for your incompetence, Gallagher" - Shrumertaor
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Jake Trommer Member

Joined: 22 Jun 2008 Posts: 63 Location: An express elevator to Hell, going down
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Posted: Fri Mar 05, 2010 9:59 pm Post subject: |
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Thanks for the comments, Shurm! And funnily enough, you described to a T the Shepard I've been using... _________________ Sir Isaac Newton is the DEADLIEST SON OF A BITCH IN SPACE!
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