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What Once was Ours, chapter 6
Posted by Jake Trommer (wedgefan@comcast.net)
21 February 2010, 6:04 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Jake_Trommer0221101804071.html

[Col. Knadan]

I was wondering when this would be posted and I have to say, it was a good read. A do have a few questions though, not complaints. 1) have you watched Zulu and the Dirty Harry movies recently? 2) do expect anybody to not know very specifically which squad of ODSTs that was? Honestly? Chainsaw through butter huh? You should consider trade marking that, that does convey the effectiveness of det cord more than the other saying. That's it, I'm not complaining if the answer to either question is a yes, I'm just curious. Quite the monkey wrench you threw into the works for Parangosky though isn't it?
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[kabu]

I don't have a lot of time to write this so I'm keeping it brief:

1 - This is, of course, up to your usual high standards of quality and a great read.

2 - Too many cameos, and if I'm not mistaken you quoted a speech from "The Rock."

3 - Melodrama up the ass. This isn't necessarily a bad thing, but goes against my personal tastes.

So basically this is a great chapter, but it won't be one of my favorites. Good work anyway, though.

kabu out.
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