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PostPosted: Sun Dec 27, 2009 3:44 pm    Post subject: The Bright Librarian Reply with quote

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Posted by CaptainTony (FieryHabaneros@gmail.com)
23 December 2009, 12:43 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=CaptainTony1223090043461.html
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PostPosted: Sun Dec 27, 2009 5:55 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Oh boy. You are going to catch a lot of flak for this one. "Live long and prosper," the "Galactica," pop-culture references don't go over well (except in parody). I'm going to let somebody else start tearing into you for writing a Forerunner perspective.
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PostPosted: Sun Dec 27, 2009 9:02 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

kabu wrote:
Oh boy. You are going to catch a lot of flak for this one. "Live long and prosper," the "Galactica," pop-culture references don't go over well (except in parody). I'm going to let somebody else start tearing into you for writing a Forerunner perspective.


Honestly, I didn't like the Prologue (what this is) very well after posting it. I'm not going to blame this on the lack of Forerunner culture that we know of, but I had no platform to base the Forerunners off of, and that's why I didn't appreciate it.

Therefore, their attitude, etc. is VERY similar to modern-day Humans, which in the end, I didn't find very appealing. Hopefully Origins and the first Forerunner Trilogy installment will aid me in focusing on a better and more refined Forerunner culture, doctrine, etc. in the present day (post-Great War), when the Office of Naval Intelligence makes a Section Three division solely established to find lost artifacts and facilities, hoping to learn more about them.

As for the lame pop-culture references, I accidentally kept the place holder content in when I submitted it without notice. Yet another reason why it's very, very bad. Wink

Then again, I haven't wrote a proper fan fiction story in a few years, so that's why it's crappy. Again, I apologize if anyone had any issues with this prologue, but please, feel free to critique it in any way possible.
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