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Vestal Sins: Epilogue: All Too Human

 
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PostPosted: Fri Aug 07, 2009 12:04 pm    Post subject: Vestal Sins: Epilogue: All Too Human Reply with quote

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Vestal Sins: Epilogue: All Too Human
Posted by Arthur Wellesley (arthur_wellesly@hotmail.com)
7 August 2009, 5:21 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Arthur_Welle0807090521091.html
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PostPosted: Fri Aug 07, 2009 1:28 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I haven't commented much, but I've been reading this series part by part.

What really intrigued me is the way Lansing changed his view like somewhat of a snake, though I'm convinced that's not exactly the way you intended to portray him. When Eyal first interviewed him after he came out of that electoral meeting, he seemed extremely uninterested in Eyal's intention to find out more about the Cedar Gables incident. After assigning his gorilla troops to beat him up, I really thought Lansing would suffer a surprising fate. The way you ended this, however, crushed my initial opinion of Lansing's behavior and switched to a casual meeting in a restaurant where both of them talked and understood each other. That was really well done.

The changing relationship between Eyal and Mantega, after being pissed at him in the last part, and now revealing her true feelings added to the sense of surprise for me as well.

The format of this particular entry set the mood for an epilogue well. The first few sections with Eyal reading and reflecting upon the article in the newspaper brings in something new to the series.

A very thrilling series from the start. Put together with the sentiment of Halo, they're perfect for character development. Wink
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PostPosted: Sun Aug 09, 2009 2:58 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Finally caught up! Sorry about being so lax about commenting, Arthur. Your series deserved so much more.

Truly is an epic story. One of the best series on HBOFF.
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PostPosted: Mon Aug 10, 2009 3:56 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thanks a lot, to both of you guys. I appreciate the comments.

I always find that in most movies and books, the moralist hero always wins out over the immoral antagonist. I wanted to make a story where immorality triumphs.

Thanks again.

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