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PostPosted: Fri Jul 24, 2009 2:42 pm    Post subject: Not what you think it is Reply with quote

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Not what you think it is
Posted by 4642 Elitist Bastard (4642eb@googlemail.com)
24 July 2009, 12:50 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=4642_Elitist0724091250241.html
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 24, 2009 2:51 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Great start, eb, I'm especially liking the rapport between the AI and the pilot.
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PostPosted: Sat Jul 25, 2009 12:33 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I like this one. The second conversation lacks the punch of the first, but it's still really good. And I can tell you've watched Moon recently...

Anyway, great job.
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PostPosted: Sat Jul 25, 2009 1:04 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

kabu wrote:
The second conversation lacks the punch of the first, but it's still really good. And I can tell you've watched Moon recently...


What on earth makes you say that? Wink
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PostPosted: Sat Jul 25, 2009 10:07 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Intriguing... got me curious about who or what that other AI really is. Dialogue's quite well-written too, in my opinion.

On another note, if you don't mind a sorta personal question... where are you from? I'm just asking because "Szilard"(/Szilárd) is a distinctly Hungarian name; it stood out for me immediately. :)
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PostPosted: Sat Jul 25, 2009 10:34 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

SNobleJr wrote:
On another note, if you don't mind a sorta personal question... where are you from? I'm just asking because "Szilard"(/Szilárd) is a distinctly Hungarian name; it stood out for me immediately. Smile


I'm from the cruddy end of Surrey in the UK, so no Hungarian origins there I'm afraid Smile

I named him after Leó Szilárd, the Hungarian phsyicist, because it seemed appropriate. I stopped short of going overboard with the Moon references and calling the AI Gerty, and I just thought of a name off the top of my head. It seemed appropriate, so I just put it in.
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PostPosted: Wed Jul 29, 2009 2:09 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Very interesting, eb. The first conversation was particularly intriguing. The second was still interesting, but not quite as much. You've got a good hook here for whatever's next, and I'm looking forward to your take on the post-Halo 3 setting. Wink
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PostPosted: Wed Jul 29, 2009 5:13 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Very interesting, eb. Obviously not much to say yet, except that this looks to be a great setup for an intriguing story. I'm always interesting to see how authors will handle the post-war situation. As the pre-war canon is becoming increasingly established by Bungie and other sources, post-war Halo seems to be the obvious new direction for Fan Fiction writers. The concept here - a possibly rampant AI on a dead world with deep space missions to discover what it is - seems to have all the markings of a science fiction classic.

Looking forward to where you take us, eb.

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PostPosted: Sat Aug 08, 2009 12:43 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I'm with the rest of the pack here: good work. I really enjoy this all dialogue stuff. I agree with kabu, though, the second conversation didn't match up to the first. But that's not at all to say it wasn't well-done.

Looking forward to this and curious to see what you're take on post-war is Smile
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