HBO Fan Fiction

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Halo: Seed of Orion (Prologue)
Posted by Wolverfrog (Wolverfrog49@Hotmail.com)
1 July 2009, 9:39 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Wolverfrog0701092139331.html

kabu · Posted: Sun Jul 12, 2009 4:17 am Post subject:

I'm really bad at writing reviews, so this is going to be pretty short.

Anyway, I really like this. Fun, light on its feet, fast-paced but detailed, you have a great writing technique. The plot grabs my interest right away as well, and you get into Dave's head in a very realistic and interesting way. There are a few big clichés, but I think it still works well.
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JamesR · Member Joined: 16 Jul 2009 Posts: 3

The beginning was just a tiny bit weak, but the middle and end picked up nicely. The story/plot evolution is great, although you could be more descriptive of your settings/environments. I thoroughly enjoyed this story, it was a good pick, I haven't been to HBO since I did fan fic back when halo 1 was out. Keep these coming.