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Halo 4 screenplay REWRITE
Posted by Spartan Shot (farfrompuken191@cs.com)
19 June 2009, 4:43 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Spartan_Shot0619091643091.html

[SYSTEM]

The first thing you're going to need to look up if you want to make your submission readable is proper script format. Now, because the forms are going to be a bit different, and you don't get access to rich text formatting, you'll need to use the [indent] BBcode tag to work around the lack of formatting and the way doube spaces are deleted. The preview key is there for you to use, so make the best of it. You'll also need to clean up your writing mechanically, problems with phrasing and punctuation are a biggie here.

As for proper script formatting itself, you'll find it here in this neat PDF. Save it, and you can read from it often.
http://www.bbc.co.uk/writersroom/scriptsmart/screenplay.pdf

If making your scripts turns out to be difficult, you can use Celtx to visualize them, visit Celtx.com if you want to get it. Be warned that Celtx can't currently export to too many file formats.
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[StevieTopSiders]

CeltX confused the butt out of me, but I'd give it a try if you want to do a screenwrite. And since this has been re-written, it shows that you are at least putting some effort into it. I'd even proofread for you if you wanted to send the next update my way.

Other things: Brutes can't have low-tech ships that are powerful, the Arbiter lost his real name (he is simply Arbiter), and Elites do not know their fathers.

[kabu]

Okay, I still like it, but once again it isn't a screenplay. You seem to be stuck halfway in between screenplay and story, some bits with descriptive narration and some bits with stage direction. A random example that catches my eye:

[spartan shot]

Once again, thanks for the tips. I think I'm leaning towards story more than screenwriting but i didn't want to abandon the idea of the levels and missions. And for the record, my idea of giving the Brutes powerful but primitive ships was simply that they were slow and that they lacked up to date Slipspace reactors and such but focused on weaponry and armor. And most Elites RARELY know their true fathers as stated on

http://halo.wikia.com/wiki/Elites

This could mean that the Arbiter may know his father since he is or was part of a ruling family. As for the Arbiter loosing his name, that was the rules set down by the Covenant. He could have reclaimed his old name when the civil war broke out. I could be wrong though. I appreciate you reading this story/sceenplay or whatever you want to call it. I'm not submitting anything else in the near future so thanks again.