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PostPosted: Fri Jun 05, 2009 6:37 pm    Post subject: So Terribly Amusing Reply with quote

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So Terribly Amusing
Posted by SeverianofUrth
5 June 2009, 8:10 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=SeverianofUr0605090810281.html
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 05, 2009 8:23 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

You're a scary man, Sev.

But you write so good. Very Happy

Another good one, I thought, if not a little morbid.
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 05, 2009 8:46 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Not really a poem, but not a story either. We'll call it a "poetic vignette".

Whatever it is, it wasn't "so terribly amusing," but definitely worth a chuckle. Nice one. Wink
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 05, 2009 10:04 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Reminds me of a line by Daniel Craig in Road to Perdition. Pretty good for a handful of words, but when did you start making things so dark?

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PostPosted: Sat Jun 06, 2009 12:32 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

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You're a scary man, Sev.

But you write so good. Very Happy

Another good one, I thought, if not a little morbid.


Thanks. Smile

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Not really a poem, but not a story either. We'll call it a "poetic vignette".

Whatever it is, it wasn't "so terribly amusing," but definitely worth a chuckle. Nice one. Wink


The title was actually meant as something along the lines of 'ouch, but I'm loling a bit.' The first few lines--about the Helljumpers and how they all died--was from a story I scrapped.

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Reminds me of a line by Daniel Craig in Road to Perdition. Pretty good for a handful of words, but when did you start making things so dark?

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Well, I'm not trying to go 'dark' or whatever--these just seem to happen. I actually didn't see it as a very dark piece, more like a little packet of words about the absurdity of their situation.
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PostPosted: Sat Jun 06, 2009 1:24 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

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Well, I'm not trying to go 'dark' or whatever--these just seem to happen. I actually didn't see it as a very dark piece, more like a little packet of words about the absurdity of their situation.

I was kidding. You've always been dark. That's why I read you. I'll be doing a proper review of Eating Jackals tonight.

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PostPosted: Sat Jun 06, 2009 1:30 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

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I was kidding. You've always been dark. That's why I read you. I'll be doing a proper review of Eating Jackals tonight.

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I'm terrible at reading the subtext, or whatever it is called. Embarassed
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PostPosted: Sat Jun 06, 2009 10:16 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Chuckles wrote:
but when did you start making things so dark?

C.T. Clown


Sounds like you've got competition, Chuckles.

Very interesting concept.

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PostPosted: Thu Jun 11, 2009 5:21 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

What else can be said?

Brevity is the soul of wit, and that was on display with this piece. No fancy descriptions, no drawn out dialogue, prologue, or epilogue. Just the smallest, most effective lines.
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 12, 2009 1:00 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I just realized I never commented on this.

Very good, Sev. There is certainly much skill involved in making the few words provided snap as they should. You economized your words well. We get an intro, a rising action, a climax, a falling action, and a conclusion - all in less than one hundred words. As a demonstration of creative skill?

Excellent, as usual.

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PostPosted: Fri Jun 12, 2009 5:44 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

thanks guys
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 12, 2009 11:27 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Short and sweet, Sev. So terribly depressing, and I've got an image in my head of Command just laughing his ass off, the troops starting up nervously but eventually in full swing. Great work. Wink
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