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So, We Lost.
Posted by SeverianofUrth
24 March 2009, 5:19 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=SeverianofUr0324091719541.html

kabu · Posted: Fri Mar 27, 2009 3:20 pm Post subject:

Congratulations, Sev, you have successfully crafted the most disturbing simile I have ever seen. Dear god, I have to go pour acid into my eyes now.

Other than that, I have to say that this is incredibly depressing, which is a good thing. Anything I read that elicits genuine emotion gets, like, five thousand points. The story of some poor bastard dying in a puddle of excrement... fantastic!
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SeverianofUrth · Posted: Fri Mar 27, 2009 9:50 pm Post subject:

Thanks for the review! I hope I was able to get a nasty chuckle out of you.

What simile are you talking about, by the way?

kabu · Posted: Sat Mar 28, 2009 2:29 am Post subject:

CaptainRaspberry · Posted: Sat Mar 28, 2009 4:30 am Post subject:

This was good, wonderfully dark. I enjoyed it a lot. There was only ever one other story I read that dealt with surviving the glassing of a planet underground, and yours is much more artistic and shot through with realism than the other (though that one was more narrative and linked to a bigger story).

Still, incredible job, man.
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SeverianofUrth · Posted: Sat Mar 28, 2009 5:34 am Post subject:

Chuckles · Posted: Sat Mar 28, 2009 8:07 am Post subject:

One of the reasons I like to write horror—or can write it for that matter—is that my mind used to run through worst-case scenarios as if it was getting paid for it. I'd think up dozens of them every week in dark red detail. Not because I was trying to be creative. No, my mind just went that way for God knows why. When I grew up and started watching horror movies I couldn't find anything that scared me because nothing could compare to the bleakness of my nightmares and daydreams. Still, I was a happy kid. Go figure. I don't know if you grew up smiling or not Sev, but our brains apparently shared the same hobby.

This was well thought out and terrifyingly genuine. That bit about the COM chatter becoming too ghoulish to listen to was brilliant. Here's one of my favorite parts:

fallschirmjager · Posted: Sat Mar 28, 2009 8:22 am Post subject:

SeverianofUrth · Posted: Sun Mar 29, 2009 4:09 am Post subject:

CoLd BlooDed · Posted: Mon Mar 30, 2009 7:53 am Post subject:

I love how you can tackle the Halo-universe in an original, concise manner and execute it in perfect harmony with your Severian self. This was awesome. Optimistically dark. Poor guy.

Oh, and I've already booked a flight to your town. I'll be there in a couple days!

SeverianofUrth · Posted: Mon Mar 30, 2009 8:06 am Post subject:

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SeverianofUrth · Posted: Fri Apr 03, 2009 4:35 am Post subject:

kr1 · Posted: Sat Apr 04, 2009 7:29 pm Post subject:

Not much more to be said that hasn't already been said. Great work here, Sev. I liked the bits where the narrator would remember the things he'd forgotten. Just adds a bit more realism, especially since he never thought he'd actually need the shelter.

SeverianofUrth · Posted: Sat Apr 04, 2009 10:36 pm Post subject:

Hmm, the only scenes I can think of is either the protagonist's escape after getting nailed to a board in Gates of Fire, or Paul Dure's crucifixion and his continuous death and rebirth in Hyperion.

Thanks for the comment, kr.