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Amethyst part 6 - Cross Purposes
Posted by kr142616
14 November 2008, 2:39 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=kr1426161114080239101.html

Azrael · Member Joined: 10 Aug 2004 Posts: 504 Location: Boston

Good addition.

I'm particuarly fond of how you write the Echoes and Jeff's feelings toward them. I'm pretty sure I've written that praise before, but it bears repeating.

You paint an excellent picture of the Elites in conversation. Shrinking the hologram was a nice touch.

I really wanted this to be longer. Get on part 7, darn it.

Keep up the good work.
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Jake Trommer · Posted: Sat Nov 29, 2008 3:30 pm Post subject:

Pretty nice, kr. I'm definitely going to have to take a leaf from your book when it comes to writing Elites.
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