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PostPosted: Fri Oct 31, 2008 1:05 pm    Post subject: A Mighty Sunset Reply with quote

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A Mighty Sunset
Posted by Mainevent (mainevent117@gmail.com)
31 October 2008, 5:41 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Mainevent1031080541031.html
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PostPosted: Sun Nov 02, 2008 1:28 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Not bad. Not bad at all really.

I really liked the switch in point of view coupled with the different Commanders.

I would have liked to have seen a bit more character development for myself rather than you simply telling us what they were like in the briefing room but it was still interesting.

Of the whole story, this line stands out the most.

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There were thirty-two hundred men and a million ways to die, but not a coward in the lot.


Powerful stuff.

Overall good job.
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