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Shadow of Fear: Prologue
Posted by Archangel_7 (x_archangel7_x@yahoo.com)
10 October 2008, 7:14 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Archangel_71010080714411.html

DevilsInject · Posted: Tue Oct 14, 2008 11:50 pm Post subject:

Hmm. This one is a little difficult. The writing (use of grammar, punctuation etc.)

But I felt that it ended rather abruptly though,leaving me wanting more, and leaving no true plot at all, and that bugged me a bit. Overall a good read, just try to make your writing longer, even if it is a prologue.
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