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Dark Mantle, Part Three
Posted by Cthulhu117 (azathoth117@gmail.com)
24 July 2008, 5:51 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Cthulhu1170724081751081.html

kr1 · Posted: Sat Jul 26, 2008 11:10 am Post subject:

This is getting more and more interesting, and you seem to be doing a realy good job tying together the terminals. Looking forward to seeing where you go with the Contender, and how the Suppressor does without his weapons. A clearer image of him is starting to develop in my head, too. I like how you don't outright describe his appearance, but lead us along with scraps of description.

This was short, though. That's my only complaint. Looking forward to the next one. Very Happy

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Spartan006 · Posted: Sun Jul 27, 2008 6:39 pm Post subject:

Having not read the previous two chapters I really don't know what's going here, but you've got me hooked now. Even without knowing what's going on I enjoyed this one. The characters are nicely described and the chapter flowed well.
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