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Ghosts of Erebus (part three): Beautiful, Silent Madness
Posted by Chuckles
27 November 2004, 8:28 AM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=chuckles.1127040828455.html

Chuckles · Posted: Tue Nov 30, 2004 11:00 pm Post subject:

Sorry this one was so long in coming. Halo2 took up a lot of my writing time. Hope you like it.

C.T. Clown

SYSTEM · Posted: Tue Nov 30, 2004 11:01 pm Post subject:

Loaded to the brim with all the great stuff! Chuckles, I loved that beginning - it took me by surprise completely!

- Dave.

Solidus Snake · Posted: Wed Dec 01, 2004 1:13 am Post subject:

The beginning was awesome, as for the ending. Its leaving me for more.

Can't wait for the next part Chuckles. Excellent series.

Chuckles · Posted: Thu Dec 02, 2004 2:00 am Post subject:

Thanks guys. It should just about write itself from here on in, but that last one took a bit.

C.T. Clown

SYSTEM · Posted: Thu Dec 02, 2004 2:02 am Post subject:

Chuckles, since your stories have made the "Fridge Door of Fame" so many times, I'm going to be very hard pressed to keep up. You've got more stories than I have fridge magnets!

Too bad I can't use tape, because the tape will take off the fridge's finish So for now, I'll have to keep everything on electronic archive at HFS.

- Dave.

MC's Cousin · Mr. 1337 Joined: 30 Jul 2004 Posts: 2142 Location: Here.

The flow was interesting beacuse of all those transitions, but it was easy to follow.
Also, you didn't include many enviromental/setting details. But, it wasn't something you seemed to need focus on. Still, it would have been a nice inclusion.

I loved that ending. Set it up for some great action or whatever you have planned. You kept a good emotional feel in there, too. When you said he felt something was off, I could almost feel my stomach turn.

Overall, excellent stuff. I should have read this earlier this week. But, not on to all the rest.
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-MCC

Chuckles · Posted: Fri Dec 03, 2004 8:54 am Post subject:

Thanks MC. There was some danger of the pace dragging while my main characters were on the ship, so I kept my scenes short. I went back and forth with the idea of using more details on the Cerberus. I haven't had my Spartans on large ships before, so I am going to have to improve my knowledge of them. I spent a good deal of time in both of Nylund's Halo novels before writing this chapter. I didn't use much detail, but I wanted to be sure what I used was accurate.

Thanks for reading.

C.T. Clown

Lexicus · Posted: Fri Dec 03, 2004 10:39 pm Post subject:

Chuckles,
I still get "Silence is Madness" roaring thru my head every time I see the title of this one. I'm sure the NEXT segment will fit the tempo of that song nicely.

Itchy to see what will happen next!
~Lex

Chuckles · Posted: Mon Dec 06, 2004 10:16 am Post subject:

Lex!