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PostPosted: Tue Nov 30, 2004 2:57 am    Post subject: War of Attrition Reply with quote

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War of Attrition
Posted by A Halo Fan...natic
26 November 2004, 9:44 PM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=a_halo_fan...1126042144511.html
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PostPosted: Tue Nov 30, 2004 10:43 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Great job! The rhyming was flawless, I tip my hat off to you.
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 03, 2004 1:17 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Make up your mind, Solidus. Are you gonna tip your hat or take it off? Wink

Now seriously. Hmm. It could have flowed better in a couple places and used some different words.
But, I liked it. It was well written and had a great rhyming scheme. Keep up the good poetry.
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 03, 2004 7:49 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Nice job. You really captured the hopelessness of it. Good emotion.

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PostPosted: Sat Dec 04, 2004 12:19 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thanks for the comments. I'd forgotten that I had written this. I guess that's what I get for writing at 11 pm. It might be awhile before my next poem. Sometimes I'll have an idea and I'll like it and - if I can find a way to make it rhyme - I'll make a poem out of it. I'll try and think of something next time I'm out at the bus stop. Untill then, I'll just work on "The Lost" part 3.

Thanks.
Bye.
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 04, 2004 12:21 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Whoah! Holy crap! Holy flaming ninja! MCC has more posts than hbof! And he's the guy who posts the fanfics! Holy crap!
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 04, 2004 12:26 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Interesting reaction. Nice of you to notice, though.
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 04, 2004 2:41 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Now THAT was fun!

It goes along with a nice little music. Just strum a guitar along while singing random notes. I'm sure you'll notice the tune forms quite quickly, and it sounds quite nice.

- Dave.
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 04, 2004 2:13 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hmm... I think I'll try that, Dave. As soon as I find a place to buy guitar strings. Two of mine are broken. Sad
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 04, 2004 11:28 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Buy some Ernie Ball guitar strings - they're quite good, I assure you, but they're only made for electrics.

And about broken strings, take them off, NOW! The neck, without proper tension on both sides, will twist, and you'll ruin a good guitar.

I'm looking for a tune you guys would know that would fit this poem - it has a certain rhythm that I'm looking for.

- Dave.

Post Script - I play on Ernie Ball "Skinny Top Heavy Bottom" strings, with a 10, 13, 17, 30, 42, 52 guage. The tension on the top ones are like spaghetti, but the lower ones have lots of meat. If you play lead guitar, they're quite good. Meaty rhythm guitar, and easy bending on top for lead flexibility. Now, I just need a bigger and better amp.
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