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What If Tales: The United Nations [Part One]
Posted by Jin1 (jermevans1990@gmail.com)
3 June 2008, 3:09 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Jin10603080309181.html

Azathoth · Posted: Fri Jun 06, 2008 4:55 pm Post subject:

You can haz Fanfic Pick of the Week. Congrats.

Phædrus · Posted: Fri Jun 06, 2008 5:25 pm Post subject:

This wasn't bad, but man, you need to work on your GPS. Your verb tenses were all screwed up and a couple of times you referred to something in the singular when it should have been plural. You gotta watch that, man.

UNSC Trooper · Posted: Fri Jun 06, 2008 5:42 pm Post subject:

What Phaedrus said. This is a damn fine story. I felt like one of the soldiers in Band of Brothers. And judging by the title, will this series deal with the creation of the actual United Nations in the future? Just curious. Wink

EDIT: I just realized, today is the 6th of June. D-Day!! This story couldn't have come at a better time, yay!

kr1 · Posted: Sun Jun 08, 2008 1:02 pm Post subject:

This was pretty good. Only complaint is GPS stuff, mostly verb tenses being messed up.

Curiously, how does this work with your other WWII What Ifs?

Jin1 · Member Joined: 07 Oct 2004 Posts: 24 Location: Florida

Well unlike the others which are short stories, I'm planning to make this one into a full fic, from the beginning of the invasion to end. Have some major political figures and to tell the story fully. It doesn't tie in with "After the Sky Fell" plot though.
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