HBO Fan Fiction

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I AM LEGENDARY: APPETITES
Posted by Mainevent
7 March 2008, 6:04 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Mainevent0307080604061.html

Spartan006 · Posted: Mon Mar 10, 2008 10:52 pm Post subject:

Excellent job, Main, you did real well on this one. I found Neville's message particularly interesting. Was there a reference to J.D.'s fic in there (the title at least)? The part with the probe had me a little confused, was it manned or unmanned? A little shorter than the last one, but that worked out well for me this week. Nothing wrong with it that I noticed, wonderful job. 10/10
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J. D. Ford · Posted: Tue Mar 11, 2008 12:04 am Post subject:

Ditto. I really enjoyed this. Couldn't find a fault with it, except the fact that it was too short, IMHO.

Razz

Ended right when I was really starting to get hooked on the plot and character interaction.

But that's a good gripe, methinks. Keep up the good work, Main.

~J. D. Ford
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Mainevent · Posted: Tue Mar 11, 2008 1:30 am Post subject:

There was indeed a nod to J.D.'s story in there this week.

And the probe itself was unmanned, but I decided to give it a bit of a life of its own, trying to keep it as programmatic as possible.

Shortness was an issue I debated, but for this particular series of events to have the emotion I wanted I figured it would have to do.

Thanks for commenting.

Arthur Wellesley · Member Joined: 30 Jun 2006 Posts: 306 Location: Canada

Short, but nice. Like all the pieces of this series, Mainevent, I quite enjoyed it. If it needed further proving, this chapter demonstrated that this story is a work entirely of your own creation. This new development has great potential - this new fellow seems interesting. Morally ambiguous to say the least - a very creepy ending, by the way. I am very eager to see where you take it.

Too bad it wasn't a little longer. Nonetheless, a fine piece.

- Arthur
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