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PostPosted: Wed Nov 24, 2004 9:55 am    Post subject: Parcel o' Rogues Reply with quote

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Parcel o' Rogues
Posted by Jillybean (jbean_gotmuse@yahoo.co.uk)
21 November 2004, 8:15 PM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=jillybean.1121042015511.html
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PostPosted: Thu Nov 25, 2004 6:16 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

This is an excellent story. Probably the best I've ever read. The plot moved quickly, it was coherent, the detail and description was absoloutely perfect. Hell, there was evena bit of humor in there. Great job.

We need more people like yourself contributing to these forums! Keep up the good work.

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PostPosted: Thu Nov 25, 2004 3:35 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Dude this was friggin SWEET!

Your descriptions were thorough and sent the story along on a smooth plot and peculiar events. Sweet.
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PostPosted: Thu Nov 25, 2004 4:47 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Very good, I liked it alot. There were some, very very minor grammatical errors, but otherwise, it was a good story.
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PostPosted: Thu Nov 25, 2004 10:27 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Well written, like 'Nosolee said, some small grammatical errors, but nothing event-changing.

Keep it up.
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PostPosted: Fri Nov 26, 2004 12:46 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Few small glitches, but HEY!

This is great!

- Dave.
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 27, 2004 5:42 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

The reason it took so long for me to get to this story was the name. It sounded like it was going to be a piece of crap. But this is arguably the best story in the whole damn databse. The only person who could write a better story thant this is Tom Clancy. You are awesome.
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PostPosted: Sun Nov 28, 2004 2:15 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

He-heh. What do we have here? Jillybean. My my. It has been a while since I have seen you here. Unless my memory fails me.

Anyway. The writing was very good. Kept my attention without fail.
But, I still have some little things to say; who would I be without some constructive criticism?
I didn't like how it went by so fast. Yeah, the plot moved well, but the story itself I thought could have been strung out a little more. I was getting into things, but they were moving by so quickly, I couldn't grab on and savor all tha I would have liked.
I thought that some of that could have been solved by a few more descriptions and/or explenations. You know, a slight use of more detail; not to say you didn't have any.
As for your personalities, well, I thought that they were about 96 percent accurate. Not perfect [who is?] but good. I didn't have to struggle to see the words from each of them.

Overall, best piece I have read in a while. A few days at least. It wasn't super suspenseful, but I still want to see where you take this. You should write more often, man. Keep up the good work.
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 02, 2004 4:11 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Good ol' jillybean back in action. Hope you write more often, I have always loved your work.
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 02, 2004 9:27 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Friggn awasome. after i beat halo 2 i wondered what happend to the Arbiter, Maranda Keyes, and Sarge. (isn't it nice to see humans and covies working together, although it is strange)

YOUR AWASOME!
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 15, 2004 12:19 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

*silence* oh....my....god.
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