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HALO: Iron Cross [Chapter Five]
Posted by UNSC Trooper (unsctrooper@hotmail.com)
21 January 2008, 8:40 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=UNSC_Trooper0121082040451.html

[Arthur Wellesley]

Good work, Trooper. I must say, I really enjoyed this, from the nicely selected quote at the beginning right to the thematic final word. You displayed a good writing style and showed an impressive hand at story telling. This piece, like those that preceded it, read very well. Overall, a solid job.

I do agree, however, with Azrael's assessment of the previous chapter which also applies to this one:

[UNSC Trooper]

Thanks for the feedback Arthur! Well, what I was basically going for here is what you mentioned, a "Neo-Frieden" group, since the Friedens were fascists. However, the group I've protrayed here is actually a subcell of the United Rebel Front, and although they are very similar to the 22nd century Friedens, they work by a different system - more "Covert" if you will, looking to conduct secret operations against the UNSC, as opposed to starting an all-out war like the Friedens did.

And yes, I have some deviations in my description which I'm currently doing my best to overcome. Thanks for the comment!