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PostPosted: Fri Dec 21, 2007 12:41 pm    Post subject: Winter Wasteland Reply with quote

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Winter Wasteland
Posted by kr142616 (kr142616@aim.com)
21 December 2007, 2:47 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=kr1426161221070247451.html
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 21, 2007 2:01 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Pretty funny stuff. I laughed all the way. Laughing Well done.
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 21, 2007 8:54 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Well, it ain't pick of the week, but I'm glad someone enjoyed it.
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 21, 2007 9:02 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Make that TWO people who enjoyed it. Wink

Definitely kept the ring of the original song, which is good for a layman like me to be able to hear it in his head. Also, made sense without trying too hard or coming up with ridiculous stuff to rhyme with.

Merry Christmas.
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 22, 2007 3:53 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

The melody was good, but it was off at some parts, like it was an extra word added here and there that to me wouldn't have fit if the actual instrumental was placed over top. Then again, probably no one else thought of it in that sense, but I'm a musician, so it's something I'd take notice of I guess.

Otherwise, great job. I had a good laugh too! Very Happy
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PostPosted: Sun Dec 23, 2007 1:53 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Well done, kr. Like Max said some parts seemed to off a little, but after reading it through again I could tell how you meant it to go. Thanks for the Christmas cheer! 10/10
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PostPosted: Sun Dec 23, 2007 1:59 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I can see what you guys mean. The Sidewinder line stands out particularly, and there were some inconsistencies in my use of "O" and "oh". I only remembered I had this late Thursday night, but I still should've caught those. Glad you like it anyways. Very Happy
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