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To Hell And Back- Chapter 2: Lock And Load
Posted by CovieKilla (dandaman_10@hotmail.com)
26 July 2004, 7:02 AM

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=coviekilla.0726040702333.html

Chuckles · Posted: Fri Jul 30, 2004 1:00 pm Post subject:

The dialogue was a bit rough, but not bad. Just watch out for redundancies, which can be hard when dealing with names.

Excellent ending, and the ending is the most important part of a story, even in the middle of a series. Well done. I'll look forward to the next one.

C.T. Clown

CovieKilla · Posted: Fri Jul 30, 2004 5:35 pm Post subject:

Thanks, Chuckles...I had some difficulty with this one...Added some parts then scrapped others and so forth. I have Chapter 3 and am in the editing process right now. Hopefully I can post it soon.

Keep them comments coming!