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The Grunt Rebellion Part 1: Riot gone bad

 
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PostPosted: Sun Nov 25, 2007 5:17 pm    Post subject: The Grunt Rebellion Part 1: Riot gone bad Reply with quote

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The Grunt Rebellion Part 1: Riot gone bad
Posted by Zikor (Zikor@comcast.net)
19 November 2007, 4:03 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Zikor1119070403171.html
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PostPosted: Mon Nov 26, 2007 11:25 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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NOTE: this was originally just going to a be a story to submit out of bordom but i figured what the hell.
No, don't do stuff like this. Author notes are fine, but not if they're giving excuses for your lack of interest.

Now, let's get to the story. There were lots of capitalization errors, but I am happy that you split up your paragraphs. Always be sure to split at scene changes or speaker changes.

Proofread. Proofreading will help you get rid of those spelling errors.

Use this --> CODE <-- This will help your stories.

Lengthen it up some next time, proofread, and use the CODE. These things are what will make your story good. Keep it up! 6/10
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