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Skul
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I pick the second option.
*Turns to page 7*
Seriously, now. This was... interesting, but second person doesn't really work for these kinds of stories. This style should only be used for those 'Choose Your Own Adventure' books. Nice attempt, anyway.
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Azathoth
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Allow me to disagree absolutely and completely. 
I personally love second person when it's well done. It lends itself to a oneshot like this very credibly, and the result is a very intense, almost gameplay-like story. |
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kr1
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| Skul wrote: | I pick the second option.
*Turns to page 7*
Seriously, now. This was... interesting, but second person doesn't really work for these kinds of stories. This style should only be used for those 'Choose Your Own Adventure' books. Nice attempt, anyway. |
Thanks. I can understand not liking it, I'm really not sure what I think of it myself. I just wrote it to pass the time, and to see how second person would work. |
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Spartan006
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Pretty good. Being in second person it threw me off a little at some points, but overall it was still easy to read. Kudos to you for being able to right like this, because I sure can't! 8/10.
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Skul
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I never said I didn't like it. I just said second-person isn't used for normal writing. Your writing was pretty good, by the way, and at least you used the holy Code. 
Oh, and don't disagree with me, Az... OR ELSE!
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Azathoth
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Oh sh*t, I'll get cut from Code n 0 0 b!
Ahem, hem. Uh, yeah, the story was horrible and bad and Skul is always right! |
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kr1
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lol, thanks for the comments, everyone. Glad you enjoyed it.
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