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The What If Tales: A Halo Short Story

 
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 27, 2007 12:17 pm    Post subject: The What If Tales: A Halo Short Story Reply with quote

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The What If Tales: A Halo Short Story
Posted by Jin1 (jermevans1990@gmail.com)
23 July 2007, 1:45 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Jin10723070145401.html
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 27, 2007 2:36 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Very, very good. I liked this a lot. I kept wondering what exactly was going on here, and why they were using this ancient ordnance, and then I get to the end and it's like "Whatzuhwha?" Holy crap, man. World War...Covenant.

I hope that by "Tales", you mean "There's more or these."
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 27, 2007 8:46 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I plan to, started on a second story already.
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PostPosted: Fri Jul 27, 2007 11:26 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Not bad, not bad at all. It was pretty well put together and the plot is an interesting one (you haven't read the "World War" series of books by Harry Turtledove, have you?). Some GPS errors, but nothing so serious as to make the story impossible to read. I also felt like I didn't get a real sense of the soldiers' personalities with the exception of the tank commander. Other than that, good.

I'm looking forward to more. Smile
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PostPosted: Mon Jul 30, 2007 10:06 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Good, very good. Like Ster said, there were some GPS errors, but only around a half a dozen. I also like the way you started out your story. It took me while to figure out if this was earlier in history or if they had been reduced to using older weapons. Keep it up! 7/10
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PostPosted: Mon Jul 30, 2007 10:35 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Bravo, Bravo. One of the best I have read.

Looking forward to see more of you here.
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PostPosted: Sat Aug 11, 2007 5:12 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

nicely done, though of course, it uses the old theme of new scifi villians aiding the nazis, what would have happened, blah, blah, blah. Doesn't make it anyless enjoyable. Smile good job. I really liked it. ditto to whats said up above as well.
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