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The demise of the Licentious
Posted by Dr Sky Tower (johnnyfive@xtra.co.nz)
22 July 2007, 2:52 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Dr_Sky_Tower0722070252081.html

Dr Sky Tower · Posted: Tue Jul 31, 2007 12:44 am Post subject:

Ooooh! I've noticed there hasn't been a lot of new stories coming up in here as of late... so I thought I'd pen this story and add it to the list...

Was a lot of fun writing this story, I must say Twisted Evil

Phædrus · Posted: Tue Jul 31, 2007 1:31 am Post subject:

"Dysonasphere"? Heh, gotta love Dr. Freeman Dyson. Wink

This was an interesting story. I really don't know what to think about it. It's unconventional enough to be interesting, but I'm not sure if I like the changes to canon or not.

Bah, I'll just comment on your writing instead of your plot. Wink

There were very few GPS errors, though there were places where you used commas where I would have used semicolons. Also, I'm not sure if I'd refer to Sentinals as "creatures", and "mechanoid" is also an unorthodox term. I'm also not sure if they'd be referred to as "major" or "minor" or whatever.

But overall, interesting story...
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Dr Sky Tower · Posted: Wed Aug 01, 2007 2:16 am Post subject:

When i wrote this I didn't want to make it part of the 'official' halo canon, this was just a random story I put together. I'm sure there's no Reapers or Terraform stations in the Halo universe, is there? Smile

As for Sentinel classes, this stuff is official, the silver are called minors, gold: majors. I made up the black armoured leader, the white Mercenaries/Ultra Sentinels. Heh. Plus i liked the use of 'mechanoid' it's a better word that 'robot' (eesh). Although I could drop the use of 'creature'. How about 'mechanoid creature'? LOL