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War's a Fine Trade
Posted by A Halo Fan...natic (mikeandrewp@gmail.com)
19 July 2007, 4:20 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=A_Halo_Fan..0719070420381.html

(Na)Marl · Posted: Fri Jul 20, 2007 6:33 pm Post subject:

--First post, omfg!!

--Heh, well, you know my thoughts on the matter Phae. I enjoyed it liek a mondo-sized proportion of enjoyment. It was . . . unique.

Phædrus · Posted: Fri Jul 20, 2007 6:34 pm Post subject:

Beauty.

Amaranthine · Member Joined: 10 Aug 2004 Posts: 55

No mistakes that I could find. Good job.

Phædrus · Posted: Fri Jul 27, 2007 2:03 am Post subject:

What, no more comments? This is one of the best things I've written! Come on, people! Evil or Very Mad

Azathoth · Posted: Fri Jul 27, 2007 2:41 pm Post subject:

I think having two trillion people on the Earth five hundred years from now is pushing it a little. I'd say this planet can support 150 billion tops. Hell, it can't even keep 7 billion people together properly, so how could it support 300 times that?

Good story though.

DraconicDreams · Member Joined: 11 Oct 2005 Posts: 170 Location: Jersey

I loved it on Devart, love it there. Excellent work. <3

Spartan006 · Posted: Sat Jul 28, 2007 11:48 pm Post subject:

Good work, Phaedrus. Like I said in the writer's help section it sounds like a commercial or something like that in the beginning, but later it seems to be more like a description of this man's life. Keep it up! 8/10
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Phædrus · Posted: Sun Jul 29, 2007 12:13 am Post subject:

Thanks, 'all. I need appreciation, or else I get sad. Sad

Archangel_7 · Posted: Wed Aug 01, 2007 6:24 am Post subject:

Welcome to my world.

Anyway, I didn't find any mistakes worth noting and enjoyed it overall. Especially the passage about the true worth of 'heroes.'
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Guardian · Posted: Wed Aug 01, 2007 2:42 pm Post subject:

2 trillion... that's like my first Alternate Realities Chapter with several THOUSAND human ships fighting HUNDREDS of Covenant Ships, and Human forces losing HUNDREDS of their ships at the end of the battle.

Outside of that, I liked it.

Phædrus · Posted: Wed Aug 01, 2007 3:42 pm Post subject:

Thanks. As for the two trillion thing, well, mebbe that was a little far field. But, I expect that with imports from other planets, Earth could support up to 300 billion.

Guardian · Posted: Thu Aug 02, 2007 3:15 am Post subject:

well 300 billion would be realistic if you considered Earth to become kind of like Cybertron. Nearly every land and water portion of it would be covered with Cities. Above ground, in air, underground, under water, and in lower orbit or cities reaching as high as lower orbit.

Lord Palarious · Member Joined: 08 Aug 2007 Posts: 29

excellent peice. and these idjits don't know crap about population support. In that kind of future, we could probably put more than 2 times that, easy. Expecially with imports. Maybe even without. We'd have to destroy a lot to do that, though. So, 2 trillion sounds quite cozy to me. Looking forward to more.

Chuckles · Posted: Sun Aug 19, 2007 6:54 am Post subject:

Nicely done. The narration had a style and personality that was interesting and (most impressive of all) consistent. This sort of thing often degenerates into a mess of overcooked speech, with the narrator dropping the beginning and ends of half of the words in an effort to sound "real." You never fell into that trap. By the middle, I felt as if I was listening to an honest-to-God soldier. And from the 26th century, no less.