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The War Machine
Posted by GLADIATRRR3000 (gladiatrrr3000@hotmail.com)
13 July 2007, 4:03 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=GLADIATRRR300713070403111.html

Phædrus · Posted: Fri Jul 13, 2007 2:33 pm Post subject:

Very good. Not really very many complaints at this point, though I would have put more confusion into the Helljumper's point of view. I'd also like to say, as a one time victim of a concussion, that you don't just get up and walk away from a concussion. It hurts. Like shit. For at least twelve hours, minimum. And you generally have blurred vision for several hours as well. And a splitting headache. And it's hard to think straight. But the movies don't tell you that, so I'll let you slide. Wink

Amaranthine · Member Joined: 10 Aug 2004 Posts: 55

Having never suffered a concussion, I really didn't know how to flesh that out.
Thanks for the advice. I'll keep that in mind.

Syotica · Posted: Wed Jul 18, 2007 7:46 am Post subject:

Awesome work, as usual. Smile

CoLd BlooDed · Posted: Thu Jul 19, 2007 10:47 pm Post subject:

Nice. I liked the blurb with the AI of the ring. The last section with what I'm assuming to be Gravemind was very ominous, too, seemed cult-like, what with all those capitilizations. Almost like everyword had some sort of history to it. Wink

Cool stuff, good to see you writing after who knows how long (besides you). Let's get some old regulars back in here, right?

Amaranthine · Member Joined: 10 Aug 2004 Posts: 55

I would be surprised to see some of the Oldies here.
How long has it been since the decline of the Golden Age?

I'm sure everyone's moved on.

CoLd BlooDed · Posted: Mon Jul 23, 2007 2:42 am Post subject:

Yeah, we've gotten past it.

Hmm, golden age... that was when I was about twelve and thirteen. I'm going on seventeen, now. Wink

Guardian · Posted: Mon Jul 23, 2007 4:58 pm Post subject:

the Golden age was from early 2002 to nearing the middle of 2005. Everything went to hell from there.

CoLd BlooDed · Posted: Mon Jul 23, 2007 9:02 pm Post subject:

There's no WAY the 'Golden Age' lasted three years, Shad. The Golden Age was gone after the old comments section was taken out.

Sterfrye36 · Posted: Mon Jul 23, 2007 10:21 pm Post subject:

Well, a lot of the old hands are still around, though, and we're like fine cheese: we get better as we age. Razz

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Azathoth · Posted: Mon Jul 23, 2007 10:55 pm Post subject:

Unfortunately, cheese is still just glorified mold. Razz

Azrael · Member Joined: 10 Aug 2004 Posts: 504 Location: Boston

For the second Az, he's sure got a mouth on 'im Cool

We're still around, still looking in, and when we do post I don't mind the emaciated comments and fewer views. Those who appreciate the work will appreciate it and take the time if they want. It's admittedly harder to budget your time among real life, but when get to down to writing, boy, watch out!

Now being horribly off topic, I'll show myself the door. Thank you.
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