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PostPosted: Fri Jul 06, 2007 12:13 pm    Post subject: Hymn To The Fallen Reply with quote
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Hymn To The Fallen
Posted by UNSC Trooper (unsctrooper@hotmail.com)
4 July 2007, 3:31 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=UNSC_Trooper0704071531331.html
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PostPosted: Sun Jul 08, 2007 4:17 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote
It was alright, but there wasn't much depth to it. Come on, where's the imagery, the metaphor? You had very little. It had a good message, and you did the freeform better than most, but I think a rhyming poem could have communicated your message better.
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