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A Demon Never Dies-III of III

 
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PostPosted: Fri May 18, 2007 1:48 pm    Post subject: A Demon Never Dies-III of III Reply with quote

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A Demon Never Dies-III of III
Posted by Cthulhu117 (azathoth117@gmail.com)
17 May 2007, 9:48 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Cthulhu1170517072148481.html
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PostPosted: Fri May 18, 2007 8:23 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

A truly beautiful story, ending to one anyways. Iím no critic, so ill leave that up to the other guys, I just wanted to say how much I enjoyed the whole series, since the first one I was bugging you about the second, and the third just blew it away.

I liked how we got the brutes perspective, and how he respected the Spartans and theyíre strength, that was cool.

Amazing story, just amazing.
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PostPosted: Fri May 18, 2007 9:55 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I'm honestly not really sure if I did the right thing, making the Brute a more sympathetic character...Bungie seems to want to say "Elites good, Brutes bad." But then again, people wrote sympathetic Elite characters before Halo 2.
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PostPosted: Sat May 19, 2007 12:50 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

This is true, in The Flood Zamumee (or however you spell his name) was sympathetic to that one elite who had his head cut off in the high chamber, i cant remember his name.

I am unsure if he was sympathetic twords humands at all, but none the less he was soft in some areas.

And the brutes respect strength, it wasnít necessarily being sympathetic as much as it was regret such a great warrior had to fall. Of course you did say he felt sorry for the elite, though you didnít say that he showed that sorrow. I think every creature, no matter how strong, feels sympathy, some just choose not to show it.

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PostPosted: Sat May 19, 2007 2:19 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yeah, 'Zamamee didn't think much of humans. He was just sorry for 'Rolammee because he had been kind to him. But anyway, I chose Belisarius' more sympathetic reaction to show the fact that no race is completely evil.
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PostPosted: Sun May 20, 2007 8:22 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

An excellent conclusion to the series, Azathoth. I've enjoyed it throughout and I'm glad you finished it on a strong note. You continued an interesting character study of an Elite and explored the dichotomy of the Covenant and humanity with a very deft touch. You did a good job in separating Zara from here human counterparts, avoiding the humanization of Elites as if often seen. Zara's hopeless aggression to determine the immortality of the Spartans is a good example of this.

The end was very good as well. I thought the Brute was a nicely balanced character for the short time he was given and was a good vessel for the final narration. The final line:

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Belisarius wondered, as he and all the rest of Clear Morality evaporated suddenly into a whiff of carbon, why someone dying would waste their time to say something like that.


was very good and very effective.

A few GPS errors:

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I need to you to do it.


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Here, on the pile, lay the body of a Sangheili in black armor, manged beyond recognition.


were all there was to complain about.

Good stuff, man. Thanks for the read.

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PostPosted: Sun May 20, 2007 8:37 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Arthur Wellesley wrote:
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Here, on the pile, lay the body of a Sangheili in black armor, manged beyond recognition.


Whoops. "Yeah, better watch out for your pet Sangheili getting mange. If it does, we recommend getting our product 7-Day Mange-Away, in stores now."
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PostPosted: Tue May 22, 2007 1:26 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

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I think every creature, no matter how strong, feels sympathy, some just choose not to show it.


Not the Flood, man. Hell no. But a Brute respecting strength isn't the same as a Brute feeling sorry for the humans. [/list]
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PostPosted: Wed May 23, 2007 4:03 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

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Not the Flood, man. Hell no. But a Brute respecting strength isn't the same as a Brute feeling sorry for the humans


So very very true, but he didnt feel "sympathy" for the spartans, he felt sorrow that such a mighty warrior had fallen, very different.

And the flood thing is so true, haha forgot about them.
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PostPosted: Wed May 30, 2007 10:07 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I don't think it's that just don't feel emotions. They can't. Anyway thanks for another great one Azathoth. Smile

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