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A New Covenant chapter 2 The Great Journey to Earth

 
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 20, 2007 1:31 pm    Post subject: A New Covenant chapter 2 The Great Journey to Earth Reply with quote

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20 April 2007, 2:58 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=The_Arbiter0420070258301.html
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 20, 2007 8:55 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I have posted a revised edition of chapter 2. I noticed a few spelling errors. I hope you like it. Give me some feed back.
Thanks in advance
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PostPosted: Thu Apr 26, 2007 1:32 pm    Post subject: cool Reply with quote

I think that was cool, you did very well in the area of dialogue and believable character interaction.

but let me ask why you're writing as though its some sort of script. I am very sure i would have prefered reading somthing thats totally in the past tense.

Apart from that there were also a few spelling errors that distract.

And it was a bit too short. But all in all, good job.
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