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A New Covenant chapter 2 The Great Journey to Earth
Posted by The Arbiter (libbymesser@hotmail.com)
20 April 2007, 2:58 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=The_Arbiter0420070258301.html

The Arbiter · Member Joined: 13 Apr 2007 Posts: 3

I have posted a revised edition of chapter 2. I noticed a few spelling errors. I hope you like it. Give me some feed back.
Thanks in advance

Collins Okonkwo · Member Joined: 02 Mar 2007 Posts: 22

I think that was cool, you did very well in the area of dialogue and believable character interaction.

but let me ask why you're writing as though its some sort of script. I am very sure i would have prefered reading somthing thats totally in the past tense.

Apart from that there were also a few spelling errors that distract.

And it was a bit too short. But all in all, good job.
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