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PostPosted: Fri Apr 06, 2007 1:34 pm    Post subject: Code n 0 0 b: Chapter 4 - HBOperative Reply with quote

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Code n 0 0 b: Chapter 4 - HBOperative
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6 April 2007, 12:03 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Skul0406070003581.html
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 06, 2007 6:23 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

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Skulked off


Best. Pun. Ever.

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"Well, there was this plot contrivance, you see…"


Irreverent fourth-wall breaking humor. Love it! And the whole paragraph discussing the plot holes was clever, too, given the fact that you have so many in your story. I love self-deprecating humor in a story like that.

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counted as urgent in Seb's book (only $19.99, plus shipping).


Okay, clever, but I had to think about it.

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"Well…" Sebasman licked his lips, "it's something that we thought was dead."

"EXPost?"


I don't care what anyone else says, that right there is funny! I can't wait until the inevitable reanimated version of it!

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"Damn clichés!"


Nice. Well done, Skul. I'm looking forward to the next one. I really like how you've introduced a twist to this one with the virus rather than just a straight up invasion. It should be pretty interesting.
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 06, 2007 10:39 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Very well done. Actually got me grinning a couple times, and I laughed at the end with the "Damned cliches!" Writers block or not, this series is running strong.

Oh, also... you got me with this.

You wrote:
Sebasman walked freely among the n00bs in their main base, which was known only as Posting Practice, or PP, with many a n00b making the same unfunny jokes about the abbreviation sounding like a name for urine.


Damnit, I laughed too. It just sounds so damn noobish. Laughing

The joke about EXpost was well delivered, too - in fact, most of these were pretty well executed; good timing, original... although n00bius stereotypicos lol is almost exactly the same as Sev's Invasion of the NOOBs (I know, my character was infected with it Wink ). Other than that, fine.

I did read your last chapter, just never got around to commenting. Good luck with the rest of the series, I'll be following.
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 06, 2007 11:29 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Ah, nice. Man, I hope I get into this at some point.

"Damn cliches" was probably one of the better lines I've seen on this site.
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PostPosted: Sat Apr 07, 2007 2:44 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

That was great. Razz I haven't been following this (in fact, I didn't even know it existed), but this is quality comedy. Especially loved the part with Sy' and Expost. It's so true. In fact, he even gave control of the board to me because he thought it was dying. Rolling Eyes

Anyways, I'm gonna go read the other chapters.
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PostPosted: Sat Apr 07, 2007 3:24 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

It just keeps getting better and better. This series is one of the ones I look for every friday, and you never disappoint.
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"Oh, for the love of...!" Syotica punched a convenient nearby wall, "Damn clichés!"

As his face slowly contorted into an expression of slight pain, Sy grabbed his hand by the wrist, ringing his aching fist.

"Owww…" he moaned.
I thought this was best part of the story. 11/10 Mr. Green
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 09, 2007 7:13 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

^_^
I'm finally in!
I know it sounds retarded, but I was literally cheering (no, not cheerleading Rolling Eyes ) when I saw my name in this!
That story was well worth the wait.
11/10, and not just because I was in it. Mr. Green
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 09, 2007 8:54 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hehehe.

Well, done, Skul. Well done.

Got more than one chuckle outta me. Good stuff. Looks like I have a series to keep an eye on again.
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 09, 2007 9:25 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Now that was funny...And I dont mean funny wierd I mean funny ha ha!

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Syotica's voice crackled through the COM link, "Active Camo, this is Ark. Your signal is very weak."

"Probably due to the increased n00bishness of the place, sir. Almost anything of good quality can't enter or exist here."


Thats pure comedy!
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PostPosted: Mon Apr 09, 2007 11:59 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yeah, hell, most of the story is comedy trying to be serious (I mean that in a good way)!
*Rocks out to "Hail to 117 Anthem" by Mothergoat*
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2007 12:26 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Sorry I haven't replied, guys; I had a really bad stomach bug. I'm still not fully over it, though. I'll be back at my full 99% in a couple of days. I'll try to reply to as many posts as possible.

@Sterfrye: Can't think of anything to say but 'thanks'! Very Happy

@CoLd:
CoLd BlooDed wrote:
...although n00bius stereotypicos lol is almost exactly the same as Sev's Invasion of the NOOBs...


That's where I got it from. It just seemed to fit in. Who knows? Maybe the damn n00bs have this virus in real life...? Shocked

Oh, and...

CoLd BlooDed wrote:
...I laughed...


...I did it! Made you laugh! Now where's my fifty bucks?... Oh, wait... did we ever do that deal or was it a dream...? Crap.

@Azathoth: You'll get in at some point, don't worry.

The 'clichés' line is pretty popular... hmmm... I'll make sure to randomly throw it in during the other chapters for no apparent reason.

Not.

@AHFN: You didn't know it existed? There can be no greater heresy! Razz

Seb's reply to the "EXPost?" line was originally, "No, something that was dead, not is dead!", since, at the time of writing... well, EXPost was. I think.

@Spartan006: Thanks for the 11/10. But what happens when you read something even better than this? 12/10? 15/10? 50/10? Be careful... Razz

@Sebasman: Same comment for the 11/10 as above.

Yes, I finally added you in. Can you let me out of your dungeon, now?

@MCC: Ah thenk you.

@me (not me me, but me... whatever): I think we all knew what you meant, you funny little man.

Now try to guess what I meant by that. Wink

Phew... teh done.
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2007 12:41 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

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@CoLd:
CoLd BlooDed wrote:
...although n00bius stereotypicos lol is almost exactly the same as Sev's Invasion of the NOOBs...


That's where I got it from. It just seemed to fit in. Who knows? Maybe the d*mn n00bs have this virus in real life...? Shocked


You made me cry. I HAVE ME A PRODIGY.

Honestly though, nice story. I don't want to say excellent, because that would be robbing myself of my own *ahem* thunder.
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2007 2:53 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

YEAH, I'M IN THIS TIME =DDDDDD

Awesome story man!

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"Well…" Sebasman licked his lips, "it's something that we thought was dead."

"EXPost?"


Oh, you've got me there, you clever, you. =PPPPPPP

You've earned a massive amount of respect from me my bone-headed buddy.

And about EXpost, well, I'm working on it xD
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2007 5:25 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Skul wrote:

@Sebasman: Same comment for the 11/10 as above.

Yes, I finally added you in. Can you let me out of your dungeon, now?


Nope, not yet.
*tosses you another piece of raw meat* Twisted Evil
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PostPosted: Tue Apr 10, 2007 1:49 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

hahaha, dude im no critic, but in my opinion that was great. I'v never had a story make me laugh so hard.

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"Oh, for the love of...!" Syotica punched a convenient nearby wall, "d*mn clichés!"

As his face slowly contorted into an expression of slight pain, Sy grabbed his hand by the wrist, ringing his aching fist.

"Owww…" he moaned.


Best line, best line. Keep it up.
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