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Tricks? Part 1
Posted by zhenoob (angelex2@hotmail.com)
18 March 2007, 6:52 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=zhenoob0318070652091.html

Collins Okonkwo · Member Joined: 02 Mar 2007 Posts: 22

Believe it or not zhenoob that thing had me laughing my eyes out.
Nothing like a little laughter amidst all the seriousness i've been experiencing around here.

I am more than eager to see the next part. Very Happy

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Caleb the Jackal · Posted: Sat Mar 24, 2007 2:37 pm Post subject:

Nice dude! Since this was a comedy I won't rant too much on mistakes... Just watch your sentence structure. I will admit this was really funny and it put a smile on my face. It could have been better however if you had more carefully structured your sentences.

Overall it was good though!

Digi7 · Member Joined: 22 Feb 2007 Posts: 22

That was great! I loved it! It was really funny!
I'd put the "Laughing" Smiley in, but he just looks... awkward...

Phædrus · Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2007 2:57 pm Post subject:

Eh, I didn't like it that much. I know you were just trying to make a joke out of a few glitches, but I started getting a bit bored reading it.

Doppelsoldner · Member Joined: 06 Jan 2007 Posts: 9 Location: Singapore

hi this is me zhenoob. thanks for the positive comments, ill try to do better, but its quite hard to write these kind of things. Confused