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PostPosted: Fri Feb 23, 2007 4:56 pm    Post subject: YAPYAP Reply with quote

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YAPYAP
Posted by Raphael Canaris (spartin-458@hotmail.com)
19 February 2007, 8:02 am

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Raphael_Cana0219070802351.html
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PostPosted: Sat Feb 24, 2007 12:25 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Confused

Okay. Text wall of doom, no paragraphs, no indents, but there were capitals and commas this time. Whenever someone is saying a sentence, there must always be a new paragraph. Always try to type out your numbers, like, "ninety percent" instead of 90%.

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Laurel had said that they looked like floating octopuses...


The plural form for "octopus" is "octopi."

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Chapter 2.3!!!


Do not use more than one exclamation mark for emphasis.

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They were all tired, soar, and had plasma burns.


The correct spelling would be "sore."

Anyway, to sum it all up, it was rather long and the epilogue was odd but somewhat humorous. If you do make a third fic, make sure to include everything I have said.
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PostPosted: Sat Feb 24, 2007 9:37 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I dont mean to say any thing

But the entire fan fiction
that i posted there wasn't written by me!

This is just a copy paste of a serious
on a different forum i am on
But i did write PROFILE MARVIN MOBUTO
which got flamed
(AND I DID GET PERMISSION)
Yap yap was done some where during 06 (and ill try to start an unrelated serious) the actual creator of the of the fan fiction dosnt even remember the
epilogue
(Before he actually stopped the serious officially he made a dumb post (and that became the epilogue)
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PostPosted: Sat Feb 24, 2007 10:06 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

interu-wtf wrote:
I dont mean to say any thing

But the entire fan fiction
that i posted there wasn't written by me!

This is just a copy paste of a serious
on a different forum i am on
But i did write PROFILE MARVIN MOBUTO
which got flamed
(AND I DID GET PERMISSION)
Yap yap was done some where during 06 (and ill try to start an unrelated serious) the actual creator of the of the fan fiction dosnt even remember the
epilogue
(Before he actually stopped the serious officially he made a dumb post (and that became the epilogue)


I'm not sure what you are saying, but I can verify that the interu-wtf account is registered under the same spartin-458@hotmail.com account that the author of this story is using.
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PostPosted: Sat Feb 24, 2007 1:46 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I think he's saying that:

1 ) He is interu-wtf.
2 ) He is Raphael Canaris.
3 ) He is spartin-458@hotmail.com.
4 ) He did not write this story.
5 ) He copypasted this story from some other forum. (Bad plan, incidentally.)
6 ) He did write PROFILE: MARVIN MOBUTO.
7 ) He is angry that we did not like PROFILE: MARVIN MOBUTO.
8 ) He seems to think that because he 'got permission' to post PROFILE: MARVIN MOBUTO, we should like it. (I'm not sure what exactly he means by 'got permission'. Sometimes, I think Wu just lets some submissions through for his own amusement.)
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PostPosted: Sat Feb 24, 2007 8:24 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Whenever I hear of the number 458, the only thing synonymous with that is the .458 Winchester Magnum or the .458 Lott.

Submitting other people's stuff... eh, I don't agree with that.

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PostPosted: Sat Feb 24, 2007 10:59 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Azathoth wrote:
I think he's saying that:

1 ) He is interu-wtf.
2 ) He is Raphael Canaris.
3 ) He is spartin-458@hotmail.com.
4 ) He did not write this story.
5 ) He copypasted this story from some other forum. (Bad plan, incidentally.)
6 ) He did write PROFILE: MARVIN MOBUTO.
7 ) He is angry that we did not like PROFILE: MARVIN MOBUTO.
8 ) He seems to think that because he 'got permission' to post PROFILE: MARVIN MOBUTO, we should like it. (I'm not sure what exactly he means by 'got permission'. Sometimes, I think Wu just lets some submissions through for his own amusement.)


HEY HEY
since when did i say I was angry about you guys not liking marvin mobuto
In fact no one liked it on the other forum i am on (which i still refuse to mention)
ALSO I DID GET PERMISSION TO POST YAP YAP (i forgot his email address so i used mine and i thought i mentioned me not making it at the top of the FF)
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PostPosted: Sat Feb 24, 2007 11:55 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Oh, wait, he means that he got permission from whoever wrote the original piece. Aha.

And Dave? Call me anti-gun, but I think the 458 means whatsherface. You know, the non-canon spartan in DoA 4. Can't remember her name...
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PostPosted: Sun Feb 25, 2007 12:23 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

you mean Nicole right?
(OH and now i will mention the forum i am on)
mac.clanhalo.net
known as last grunt
The person who made the fan fiction only rarely goes to the forum these days
and if you want to know his user name it is Rebel Grunt
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PostPosted: Tue Feb 27, 2007 4:14 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Despite extreme grammar and puncuation errors it was a very good read up until the screwed up ending. Perhaps you should get permission forme the writer re write teh firt part s oits a better read, and then continue the story it does have a lot of potential.
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PostPosted: Wed Feb 28, 2007 10:32 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

captain006 wrote:
Despite extreme grammar and puncuation errors it was a very good read up until the screwed up ending. Perhaps you should get permission forme the writer re write teh firt part s oits a better read, and then continue the story it does have a lot of potential.


SHIT!!!
i have never seen such bad spelling
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PostPosted: Wed Feb 28, 2007 2:00 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Azathoth wrote:
And Dave? Call me anti-gun, but I think the 458 means whatsherface. You know, the non-canon spartan in DoA 4. Can't remember her name...


Yeah, I think I know what you're talking about. Judging by the information they put out she'd be too young to be a true Spartan-II at the time of Reach. In my humble opinion a little math and a little peek into the books would've avoided this plot hole. Of course, there's always the chance they did it on purpose, but then again, most fighting games have pretty lousy, lousy, lousy storylines that are dashed up in ten minutes to vaguely cover why a bunch of half-naked chicks with breast implant surgery that went wrong got together to fight...

I'm surprised those guys at Team Ninja didn't sexualise 'her' the way they sexualised the rest of the female cast. As in 'really' surprised, y'know what I mean.

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PostPosted: Wed Feb 28, 2007 10:01 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

lol yes ill admate my spelling is horrible just wasting your time by pointing it out because it does no good and i have seen worse spelling in the joe chief story on one of the forums haha i can just sit here all day and point out all of my flaws im my owne critic you want me to point out more just say some thing
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PostPosted: Sun Mar 11, 2007 12:56 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Would it bother you terribly - or the other guy who wrote this - if I took the story idea? I think the concept behind it is fantastic, but I'd really only be taking the main idea of it, not the actual meat of the story.

Basically, I'd just want to write about survivors on the shards of Halo 04, and I'd use the technology ideas that allow the survivors to.. well.. survive... but I'd go a few other places with it. Though I did like the idea of the grunts and the marines teaming up because they both find the war foolish. Which is quite true.
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PostPosted: Sun Mar 11, 2007 11:09 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Nock your self out!
And the bunnies on the forum i am on are dead!! Twisted Evil
LONG LIVE THE BUNNIES
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