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The Farmer: Chapter 2
Posted by AbbeyLynn (tranquilitybaseperformance@gmail.com)
31 January 2007, 4:26 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=AbbeyLynn0131071626581.html

houseoftang · Posted: Sat Feb 17, 2007 1:21 am Post subject:

Another piece of excellent work. I'm disappointed that you're not getting more comments. Maybe your chapters are too short. Or maybe everyone is just speechless. I noticed one GPS error, and I'm too lazy at this point to go back and find it. Probably a fluke--you seem to be above most of that.

Gotta love the cliffhanger ending. Didn't Kelly go Banshee-surfing in First Strike? Wasn't there duct tape involved? I'm gonna die laughing if there's duct tape involved this time. Especially if the MC duct tapes a frag grenade to the Banshee. "Would have been easier if I'd had a plasma 'nade."

Only one thing I had a bit of a problem with. The Master Chief is technically subordinate to a Lieutenant. An MC is enlisted, an LT is an officer. Not that the MC mightn't have been given command of the mission, which would make him everyone's superior on the mission, but I don't remember that happening (I also don't remember what I had for breakfast most days). Thus the MC has no actual right to order Lt. Souza around, and she has no obligation to call him "Sir". In fact, it's probably a breach of protocol.