HBO Fan Fiction

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Commencement, Prologue
Posted by Andres (andres_vera2000@yahoo.com)
21 January 2007, 7:53 pm

http://halosn.bungie.org/fanfic/?story=Andres0121071953191.html

thedarkfire · Posted: Fri Jan 26, 2007 3:08 pm Post subject:

Yuo've set up your series well. I could probably find something to comment on but I have class to go to.

Cheers!

Andres · Member Joined: 03 Jan 2005 Posts: 151

Thanks, Mr. Fire.

I for one have always seen the way the Covenant-Human battles that are described, are not realistic compared to a modern battlefield, that's why I'm doing this bit.

PS: When I say the above, I mean mainstream Halo novels, not some of Fanfics that are truly great.

russ687 · Posted: Wed Jan 31, 2007 12:43 pm Post subject:

Interesting set up for your series, Andres. I felt that it was quite bleak, how so many Marines and so much firepower couldn't even scratch a few Covenant, but I know you've got something up your sleeve for that. I was also interested in how those ships managed to become "invisible" and all, since I don't think they're normally known to do that, and also what weapons could have vaporized the advancing units.

This was predominately in the narrative, so I didn't feel very immersed in the situation, but being the prologue I half expected that. Some GPS errors, of which I don't have time to go over, but otherwise it was good. Keep on going.

-R

Andres · Member Joined: 03 Jan 2005 Posts: 151

Thanks Russ. I think I might surprise a few people with the next one, next week.